March 22, 2012

Flash-55 Fiction #1



"Life is good"
Blazed his constant chat-box status from past 3 years.
“Is your life always that good?” Irritably pinged him for first time since he was added to my contacts.
“No, the owner died 3-months back, I’m his friend, here to delete his account”, pinged back owner’s name and left me in utter shock.


P.S: After reading many flash 55 fictions (a form of writing that requires a complete story in exactly 55 words) I finally decided to give it a try. And guess where I started writing this? In my class, pretending to take notes :P
Suspicious friends (coz I'm too lazy to take lecturer's notes in class!!) wanted to know what I was upto. Showed them this and received blank reactions! They had never heard about flash-55 and didn't understand the importance when I said "seeee, only 55 words!!" :-( 
P.P.S: So I do need  real feedbacks.. If anyone's reading this please do help me out in ways I can better this form of writing :) :)

20 comments:

  1. OMG.. incredible and touchy take NEHA
    Good luck ahead...
    am sure you gonna rock in 55 :)
    Welcome aboard

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    1. Thank you Deepak for your encouragement :) :)

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  2. I think it's a tough job - just 55 words...but you go Neha.. I am sure you will do justice.

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  3. Hi Neha...It's really something where one can either come up with a fantastic thriller or end up with a not-so-impressive story. This genre is really challenging as Kajal said. As for this one, u have done a commendable job though I feel that u cud have kept the shocking part "the owner died 3 months back" as the last line....I mean, that's my personal take. Personally, I like to hold back shocking bit till the very end. Ha :) :)

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    1. Hi Ritesh, thank you for your feedback and really appreciate it. And ya you are right, I could have tweaked the words and made the shocking part to appear in the end. Will keep this in mind for the further flash-55 posts. Will be waiting for your future reviews :)

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  4. Good job!..I dont think I can ever write one :)

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    1. Hey Thanks Ana but Your witty writing is no match to my flash-55 :) :)

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  5. I think it was a great work. It has all the elements of 55 fiction. It is a 'shocking 55' and it ends on that note. It has a setting, characters and a shock/surprise which you maintained till the end.

    I wish I would have come up with this idea...:)

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    1. Thank you so much for your appreciation Saru :)

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  6. Great write Neha... unbelievable this is your first one...you'll go a long way! All the best!
    BTW I'll also be showing my First F55 soon, and will look forward to receiving your feed back!

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    1. Thank you Amit and I can't wait to read your F55 :) ... looking forward to it!

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  7. 55 fiction is really tough but you have done an excellent job. This is a brilliant first work. Loved the story. :)

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    1. Thanks for your feedback Raj :):)

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  8. You have done it really good.
    A fiction with a conflict ending in a resolution with characters in a particular situation which ends in the word limit exact or less depending on the type of flash 55 you chose. This is what I know abt flash 55 fiction.
    You've done justice to all these areas and so, very impressive.

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    1. Thank you for the info Leo and after hearing your review I'm a little relieved that I've done some justice to the story plot :)

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  9. excellent one Neha...that was incredible... :)

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  10. Neha
    very good 55
    I guess some people dont understand that writing a story in 55 is quite a challenge
    you did it well

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  11. It is your first attempt at 55 fiction? Are you serious? Hard to believe. The shock element was the best part.
    Keep writing more. You will hit the top league!! :) :)

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