"Life is good"
Blazed his constant chat-box status from past 3 years.
“Is your life always that good?” Irritably pinged him for
first time since he was added to my contacts.
“No, the owner died 3-months back, I’m his friend, here to
delete his account”, pinged back owner’s name and left me in utter shock.
P.S: After reading many flash 55 fictions (a form of writing that requires a complete story in exactly 55 words) I finally decided to give it a try. And guess where I started writing this? In my class, pretending to take notes :P
Suspicious friends (coz I'm too lazy to take lecturer's notes in class!!) wanted to know what I was upto. Showed them this and received blank reactions! They had never heard about flash-55 and didn't understand the importance when I said "seeee, only 55 words!!" :-(
P.P.S: So I do need real feedbacks.. If anyone's reading this please do help me out in ways I can better this form of writing :) :)
OMG.. incredible and touchy take NEHA
ReplyDeleteGood luck ahead...
am sure you gonna rock in 55 :)
Welcome aboard
Thank you Deepak for your encouragement :) :)
DeleteI think it's a tough job - just 55 words...but you go Neha.. I am sure you will do justice.
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot Kajal :):)
DeleteHi Neha...It's really something where one can either come up with a fantastic thriller or end up with a not-so-impressive story. This genre is really challenging as Kajal said. As for this one, u have done a commendable job though I feel that u cud have kept the shocking part "the owner died 3 months back" as the last line....I mean, that's my personal take. Personally, I like to hold back shocking bit till the very end. Ha :) :)
ReplyDeleteHi Ritesh, thank you for your feedback and really appreciate it. And ya you are right, I could have tweaked the words and made the shocking part to appear in the end. Will keep this in mind for the further flash-55 posts. Will be waiting for your future reviews :)
DeleteGood job!..I dont think I can ever write one :)
ReplyDeleteHey Thanks Ana but Your witty writing is no match to my flash-55 :) :)
DeleteI think it was a great work. It has all the elements of 55 fiction. It is a 'shocking 55' and it ends on that note. It has a setting, characters and a shock/surprise which you maintained till the end.
ReplyDeleteI wish I would have come up with this idea...:)
Thank you so much for your appreciation Saru :)
DeleteGreat write Neha... unbelievable this is your first one...you'll go a long way! All the best!
ReplyDeleteBTW I'll also be showing my First F55 soon, and will look forward to receiving your feed back!
Thank you Amit and I can't wait to read your F55 :) ... looking forward to it!
Delete55 fiction is really tough but you have done an excellent job. This is a brilliant first work. Loved the story. :)
ReplyDeleteThanks for your feedback Raj :):)
DeleteYou have done it really good.
ReplyDeleteA fiction with a conflict ending in a resolution with characters in a particular situation which ends in the word limit exact or less depending on the type of flash 55 you chose. This is what I know abt flash 55 fiction.
You've done justice to all these areas and so, very impressive.
Thank you for the info Leo and after hearing your review I'm a little relieved that I've done some justice to the story plot :)
Deleteexcellent one Neha...that was incredible... :)
ReplyDeleteNice job! Neatly managed.
ReplyDeleteNeha
ReplyDeletevery good 55
I guess some people dont understand that writing a story in 55 is quite a challenge
you did it well
It is your first attempt at 55 fiction? Are you serious? Hard to believe. The shock element was the best part.
ReplyDeleteKeep writing more. You will hit the top league!! :) :)